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This small life,
withering away,
time pulling at its very strings.

A tiny purple flower,
alone so innocent,
surrounded by death,
and after the long drought,
when the sun finally comes around,
life will spew anew from death...

October nights serve me no justice,
this rustic air ,
so refreshing when it burns..
Everything, so gray,
you never told me gray could be so beautiful.

Friends keep me warm,
yet friendship can be so cold,
sit with me tonight.
Our breath, like ghosts in the sky,
Lead the way to a frozen destination, where,
these mittens are so debonair and,
my scarf keeps me close,
please hold me like it does,
wound around me.
Your lips,
a sweet kiss of frost bite.

Could you dance with me now,
the slowly falling snow is the only thing watching us,
it lands in your hair,
so prefect, brown with streaks of yellow and red,
your head on mine,
we’ll talk about how we feel used,
all these emotions mixed in our chemical romance.

Your eyes are cold, but there is beauty there,
hold my hand until we must part ways.
you will be back again, I know this,
my heart will ache until then,
it is hard, but I’m glad I can say,
I fell in love with a girl named autumn.
DAmn these small names, The title of this poem is I fell in love with a girl named autumn, but this damn site wont let me... lol:P ok back to the poem, if u live in a place closer to the equater you'll have no fucking clue about what im talking about, I live in canada its getting cold here now and this is fall for me.... so enjoi
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:icontigerlilyvana:
TigerLilyvana Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010   Writer
This is really good! :D One of the best poems I've seen.

I live in Ohio, so, yeah, I get what you're talking about! Autumn's my favorite season, too.

And this poem is so vivid and beautiful. I can almost feel and see exactly what you're talking about :)
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TaintedFaerie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2005   Writer
October nights serve me no justice,
this rustic air ,
so refreshing when it burns..
Everything, so gray,
you never told me gray could be so beautiful.

wow. great- really.

I like the talk of colors-- I loved where you were going with it, but it seemed when you mentioned resting his head on mine or something of the sort-- that it became too non-literary, if you will... too dare I say it, almost jeuvenile. If you want my honest opinion: there it is.

The vivid imagry is wonderful, but I think if you altered or changed or deleted these three lines: your head on mine,
we’ll talk about how we feel used,
all these emotions mixed in our chemical romance.


(would have faved it otherwise)

it would be perfect.

just my initial thoughts. :heart:
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:iconyellowdude:
yellowdude Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2004

A tiny purple flower,
alone so innocent,
surrounded by death,
and after the long drought,
when the sun finally comes around,
life will spew anew from death...


reminded me of a poem I wrote myself. ;) but yes.. innocent purple flower *pets the flower*


October nights serve me no justice,
this rustic air ,
so refreshing when it burns..
Everything, so gray,
you never told me gray could be so beautiful.


I really loved those lines. ESPECIALLY the last line...... gray can be beautiful. :)
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:iconemotionalrun:
emotionalrun Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2004   Writer
just poetry for now
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theeaseofrain Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2004
are these lyrics to a song? or is it just poetry?
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Lost-Faith Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2004
ah, this is so sweet and lovely... the imagery is great and I love autumn and all the beautiful colours it brings
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:iconemotionalrun:
emotionalrun Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2004   Writer
xD thank you
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agonyandecstasy Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2004  Professional Interface Designer
I love how pastel your emotions are.
All you write about seems to be so soft.
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:iconemotionalrun:
emotionalrun Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2004   Writer
thank you :D and thank you for all your other comments :D
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DaenerysFire Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2004
Autumn is such a wonderful name. The poem is truly delightful!
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